by Genesis1016 » Sat May 13, 2017 11:17 am
Deer.i7x
say " ...At first, she's a merely tolerates...
Could be: At first, she merely tolerates
replace all the inadvertantly with inadvertently
You're such a brave dow to keep going out there.
dow => doe
He says its perfectly nutricious and all of that, but it's all bland mush. If anything, it tastes more like medicine and anticeptic cleaners than food.
Nutritious and antiseptic
You do agre to be the little herm's mate."
agree
Those jaguars don't bother me any more now that I've taught a few of them that I'm the big buck around here
anymore
She moans softly as her shaft tenses, and begins to fire, splattering herself with her seed as it arcs through the air in powerful streams.
shaft tenses and begins to fire
Her skilled fingers dip lower to caress your [short ball size] orbs in slow teasing as she bobs against you, working you to greater heights as the tingle of change sweets through you,
tingle of change sweeps through you
Ohhh... though I think I'm going to need a bit of a break before going again after that,' she says, brushing her fingertips across her stretched, swolled and leaking pussy
swollen
With this talent it's hard to keep yourself from cumming right then and there, but with some strength of mind you keep yourself in check. Sometimes she goes slow and tastes your [cock of player] cock, specially all the pre you keep feeding her.
With this talent, it's...
strength of mind, you
specially =>especially
you can see only an smile and those breasts being pressed against your cock.
only a smile
Feeling some vibrations running in your cock you know that she is amused with this occurrence. As you feel her saliva pooling beteween her boobies and your cock,
remove extra spaces before occurrence and beteween => between
You push her head against you groin
your
When you finally release her head she pulls back with a string of semen still conected to you penis wich she cleans quickly.
connected to your penis which she cleans quickly.
Thanks for the meal' you hear her say with a wink before you get ready to your adventures.
ready for
She transitions into a strong and sexy doe-buck that is an a attractive mix of the feminine and the masculine. <==multiple cases of this one
is an attractive
With easy she slides that dark cock in your tight pussy.
With ease, she
Her trusts get faster as she lets you get more used to her new size
thrusts
Your pussy call's are answered as she finally penetrates your womb filling it with her potent seed.
pussy's calls
Susan asks, posing in the new lab coat she's wearing. It is a typical one, clean and white, though the back's been adjust to let her puff of deer tail poke out
been adjusted
Smiling up at your lover, you willingly spread your legs and raise you hips
your hips
You clench powerfully around her tool, coating it with your own honies.
not entirely sure, but should that be honey?
they seem to get in the spirit of things and join the girls in the fun.
get into
At first, she a merely
At first, she merely
The horny deer keeps trusting in your needy pussy.
thrusting into
Begging to be breed by that delicious cock.
Begging to be bred
your pussy orgasms tries to grip on her ebony rod as you feel yourself trying to pull her even more deep than she already is.
not sure how to fix here but some options I guess:
your pussy orgasms as it tries to grip onto her ebony rod as you feel yourself trying to pull her in even deeper than she already is.
or
your pussy orgasms, trying to grip onto her ebony rod as you feel yourself trying to pull her in even deeper than she already is.
could simplify it even further with:
your pussy orgasms, gripping onto her ebony rod as you feel yourself trying to pull her in even deeper than she already is.
"even deeper" can also be simplified down to just "deeper".
Sarah
She whimpers but clearly is too afraid too speak as the furry male gives her breasts a lewd squeeze.
to
You make a first step towards escape, but then suddenly something swats sideways against your lower ankle - it is the alpha husky, intent on sweeping your legs out from under you from his position on the ground."
the first
her needy body's new instincts overriding her brain and reducing her to little more then your pet as you play with her sexy body. <==2 cases
than
You reward the sexy little husky by beginning to stroke her soft head-fur with your hands, rubbing and scratching at her head in encouragement even as she focuses on licking and sucking at your cock.
remove the at's.
The praise and promise of a treat makes Sarah's eyes light up with rising lust."
make
You lose track of time as you play with and tease your pet, the mutual pleasure washing away all other petty concerns as the two of you you celebrate your pet's new status together.
extra you
Sarah throws her head back and lets lose a desperate moan as you ever so slowly work your way up to her needy pussy."
lets loose
A smile tugs at the corners of your mouth as you slowly sink yourself into Sarah's well lubricated passage
well-lubricated
her body responding with pleasure to your touch and a first brush of your shaft against her nether region.
at first brush
Soon you are both grinding into each others crotches desperately,
other's
Sorry if I... squashed your idea of sex a bit to... energetically.
bit too
she pulls down down behind her and places them on her perky behind.
extra down
A flash white-furred paw-hands lets you guess it is Sarah
A flash of white
Returning to the bunker, you waste no time in pouncing on the your little slut husky, her happy moans and begging are music to your ears, as you indulge yourself with your slut.
And you waste no time testing this as you sink yourself into her warm wetness over and over, enjoying your dominance over the your little pet.in
replace the "the your" with just your
as proof of your own virility and the start of the many many young you plan to sire on your lovely little breeding slut."
sire with
Carl and Sarah are sitting at a table of the study area over there and from the looks of it they're having fun playing poker.
of it, they're
After a little while, you switching your attention to her very nice and shapely breasts, even larger now as they fill with milk for the pups."
After a little while, you switching your attention to her very nice and shapely breasts, even larger now as they fill with milk for the pups."
you switch
You slowly pull yourself up to your feet, the image of your well used pet staying with you as you prepare to explore the city some more."
well-used
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Genesis1016 on Sun May 14, 2017 8:54 am, edited 8 times in total.