TigerStripes wrote:It is mentioned in the scene that he gives you one. This is the same for all later instances where he gives you a bottle as well. If you prefer, I can add an explicit mention of getting one.
I must have missed it but it's entirely up to you on that.
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if the player allows xerxes and carl to have sex watches first sex scene and any sex the player catches the two having
Feeling the warm pulse of his cum into his body, filling his up, seems to have been the last straw for Xerxes herself, as he orgasms just moments later, panting loudly and yipping in lust as he blows a big load all over
the sheets on Carl’s mattress.
second his should be him, either remove herself or change herself to himself
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Player gives Xerxes a blow-job
You push softly against him so he lies on his side, then back, with his human erection now standing proudly upwards. Pumping your hard up and down on it again, you put your lips to its tip, then go
down on him. Xerxes moans “Good master” and yips while rubbing his hands lightly across your shoulders and starts instinctual thrusts with his hips, putting his cock deeper into your mouth and making
the most of your blow-job. It’s not too much longer before he orgasms, body twitching as his human seed gushes into your mouth. You wait until you got it all, every last shot, then swallow it down.
Giving your dog a last quick belly-rub over his hard abs, you stand back up and turn back to everyday survival while he runs off to rummage around in the stacks some more.
Second sentence- hard should be hand, its should be his
Third sentence- "starts instinctual thrusts" would sound better as "starts to instinctively thrust", putting should be pushing, remove the and in-between "mouth and making"
fifth sentence- got should be get
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When you take Xerxes to get a tattoo it says says
When you go inside, Kara smiles and greets you before over the newcomer.
Not sure what that's suppose to be.
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Male player, M-preg, Selective Mother, Easter Bunny, Bunny-fucking session
It asks me if I wish to be impregnated with a/an Easter Bunny child I chose not to accept the seed. But right after when it finishes the scene it says I'm guaranteed to get pregnant and the bunny seed takes root. But I'm not pregnant after the scene.
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Male player first time taking Ares for a walk
The thought “pretty cunning for a dog” shoots through your head seemingly all of its own, though obviously the concept of clothing being in the way did escape Ares.
first of should be on, or could say "seemingly out of nowhere" unless its intentional
Then he dismounts you and starts to lap at your butt, licking up any trickle of cum escaping your still a bit gaping pucker.
either remove "a bit" or change it to "slightly"
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